@MrMcAlpin I heard you're giving free feedback and that's awesome! So I have an English Standard assignment coming up involving a discursive and imaginative with a reflection for each. I'm gonna attach my discursive here and I'm hoping for feedback for it. My teacher told me I need to be more personal, put in more emotion, that I should have two perspectives stemming from past and personal experiences, and suggested I redo it by doing it from the perspective who had a friend who died as a result of being overworked. But ultimately I'm having trouble achieving the discursive style and knowing what direction to take it; I require your assistance!
Through the study of Helen Garner’s, Dear Mrs Dunkley and other related texts, you have become familiar with the form and features of discursive texts. You are to compose a personal discursive discussion engaging with the stimulus below:
‘There are some wounds that can never be healed’. (Helen Garner)
Anime and manga serve as a global outlet for culture and expression, but is there a dark side to such a massive form of entertainment?
Osamu Tezuka, otherwise known as the ‘Walt Disney of Japan,’ was responsible for an endless catalog of innovations in Japanese manga and anime in the 1900s. However, when starting out, networks were unwilling to take such a massive risk to air a never-before-seen animated series “Astro Boy,” and so Tezuka massively undersold his show. According to Michael Crandol, an assistant professor of Japanese studies at Leiden University, “They planned to make up for the loss with Astro Boy toys and figures and merchandise, branded candy. … But because that particular scenario worked for Tezuka and the broadcasters, it became the status quo.” The status quo being overworked and underpaid animators across a multi-billion dollar industry.
The bulk of the animation lies with ‘in-between animators.’ Once higher ups create keyframes and storyboards, these animators make all the individual drawings. Per drawing, they earn around 200 Japanese Yen - that’s less than $2. And the process is very meticulous. It can take up to an hour to create a single drawing to ensure audience and employer satisfaction with the high modern standard of work, and paired with a daunting deadline, anyone’s mental health would suffer. One studio, Madhouse, was accused of violating labor code whereby employees were working nearly 400 hours per month and went 37 consecutive days without a single day off. A male animator’s 2014 suicide was classified as a work-related incident after investigators found he had worked more than 600 hours in the month leading up to his death. That’s over 20 hours a day. The stress is high, the payout is nix, burnout is quick, and if that doesn't kill you, the culture shock will.
One of my favourites ‘HunterxHunter’ (I’ve watched this twice) has been dubbed ‘HiatusxHiatus’ because the creator never releases chapters anymore, regrettably due to back pain and sickness.
More recently, the studio of the “Attack on Titan” has been faced with backlash and toxicity on media platforms upon the release of the 4th season due to a ‘misplaced soundtrack’ and ‘bad animation,’ despite facing restrictive time constraints and the drawback of a pandemic.
But so what?!
I wouldn’t be me had it not been for the circumstances I’ve been subject to in my life. And without these conditions, who knows what we would’ve missed out on. It was these conditions that created the circumstances and resolve necessary to birth so much culture and value that is an integral part of many lives.
Take “Code Geass” for instance, it goes into deep philosophical themes concerning the sacrifice of our values to fulfill our ambitions, the value of lying in furthering desire, the power of technology to bring about yet defy peace, and so on. These shows have infinite potential to reveal and express the thoughts of so many people. If these degrading working conditions in Japan are a necessity to birth such texts, then so be it! A necessary sacrifice to further civilization, to further culture, and to enrich lives.
What I’m trying to say is that, the damage the industry causes is great, great to the point that it kills. But wouldn’t fixing these conditions make previous deaths in vain? These wounds are ones that should be embraced, for they are what will enable us to go further.